This is the first bit of my script I have been working on at the beginning of the script were Sophie is rushing to collage she’s quite shy and nervous apologising to Rob for bumping into her. At the start of the film I want the audience to relise that she’s shy girl.

When Rob is introduced he seem a lot more comfadent that Sophie. When its his idea to meet up and he aranges the day/time its shows his character taking control over it and the start of controlling her. Even though the audiance might not see it at the beginning they will later on when he takes control over her and her life.

Script

Sophie sitting on the chair on a slight angle. Looking at the floor of a few seconds and sighs then looks at the camera and begins…

It’s funny isn’t it (pause)
The odd stuff you remember, (pause) a moment ,(pause) a feeling.
Like the moment I realized I had never driven a car before or even sat in the drivers seat. Or that I have never been on my own long enough to do simple everyday ordinary tasks like doing the washing up or making my own bed.

Since I was 16 and Rob was 17 it has always been me and him (takes a deep breath and rubs her hands on her knees and looks at the camera again.)
The first year I was happy… However my friends and sister said that it was toxic. But all relationships have there rough stages… Right?

Sophie’s in a hurry to get to collage.She runs up the stairs and bursts through the front doors and suddenly bumps into Rob and drops her bag.

Sophie- God I’m so sorry I’m just in a rush that’s all.
Sophie bends down and picks up her bag looking very embarrassed.

Rob- Hey it’s fine don’t worry about it.
Rob pauses puts his hands in his pockets and looks straight at Sophie.
Rob- If you want we could meet up some time maybe (pause) after collage?

https://nofilmschool.com/Character-Development

This website really helped me and got me thinking of how the characters might be feeling in the inside. It also got me thinking about what their past would be and how it affects them as a person. It also got me thinking of what the characters goles are. For example Sophie’s gole at the start is to go to meet Rob because she’s shy and wants to get out of her com-fat zone. But by he end of the film her gole is to leve and get away from Rob as she knows he’s not a nice person to be around.

Research-

Here are some examples of some of the best screenwriters of all time. In the film I’m working on I would like to have some sense with some grate tension. For example when Rob and Sophie are in the flat after an argument and its silence or Shopie dose serene moves to show she’s about to kick off or lose it.

https://www.vulture.com/2017/10/100-greatest-screenwriters-of-all-time-ranked.html

One of the writers I have looked at is Tarantino. In kill bill 1 he creates tension by having both characters opisit each other and standing still. This scene looks similar to the one I had plan in my head. I want the main build up/ tension scene in Robs flat when they are arguing. When Sophie is about to kick off she stands up and so dose Rob and just have a few seconds looking at each other waiting to what will happen next. It also leaves the audience in suspense and wondering what will happen to the characters next.

Using Fade In

I have started using Fade In the screenwriting app. I want to get as much practise as I can using the app so I can get used too all the tools.

So I looked online to find out what all the differnt tools and buttons do and how to find my way around the app.

From watching theses videos I have lernt all the different formats like action, character and dialogue. I have also lernt how to use the navigator tool which is important so you know what page/script your working on.

This is my script for my work experiance I worte it using Fade in

THE 2000 YEAR JOURNEY

(By Poppy Jay Rhodes)

Ugg walks around the forest looking for some wood to make his fire.Then he stops and finds a blue light in the round,he leans in to take a closer look bit falls into the blue light

Ugg wakes up on the in the middle of Kendal looking very confused.

Ugg- (sits up and scratches his head and makes a grunting sound)
Ugg decides to have a look around Kendal and starts to walk down the street when a man comes up to him offering shoes

Local man- Here you go try theses.now your feet wont get sore.
Ugg reaches out for the shoes. The man smiles and walking off. Looking confused Ugg pauses and slowly puts them on his feet.
Ugg caries on walking gown the street and his stomach is rumbling and realizes hes getting hungry. He spots a tree and starts picking of the leaves and just as hes he’s about to put it in his mouth a lady comes and offers him some mint cake.

Lady- Don’t eat that here try this.
Ugg takes the food from the lady sniffs it then eats it all smiling and rubbing his stomach.The lady smiles and walks off.
It begins to rain so Ugg hurrys and tries to looks for some shelter. As he hides a little girl spots him and feels sorry for Ugg and decides to give him her umbrella

Little Girl- Here you go mister now you wont get wet.
Ugg takes the umbrella and decides to follow the girl back into the town.There are lots of people gathered at the Bird Cage wanting to see ugg thinking he’s this actor acting in a film. The towns people fave him over to try and take a picture with him.

Little Girl- Okay everybody on 3 everyone smile 1,2,3
After the photo is taken he gives the photo is taken the little girl gives Ugg the photo looks at it and smiles.
Ugg decides to go home ater his adventure out as he is walking back home he has his umbrella in his hand and is looking at the photo. When he reaches his house he puts down his things and and reaches for some chork and starts to write Kendal on his wall.
Looking happy with himself he puts his hand on the rock and says…
Ugg- Kendal ahhh
FADES TO BLACK

A group of school children and there teacher are walking around the museum looking at all the different rooms. The teacher calls the class over so that the children are all gathered around her.

Teacher- and here we have the caveman room. Here are some of the artifacts found over 2000 years ago. And is u look over here ( pointing at the slate) This is the first ever document of Kendal recorded.
The children all lean in and gasp.
It ends by the camera finishing on a close up of the slate and the fades to black.

Dramatic Monologue Research

This is more like the beginning of the film like the opening telling the story. seeming shy and doing a lot of sighing and looking at the camera and then not like in this video. I find that quite interesting because she wants to tell her story but also reluctant to and scared who might be listing.

In this one she’s angry and she frustrated. I think this would be interesting in the middle of the film when she’s upset about her boyfriend and is trying to let her anger out and try ti vet and want someone to listen to her.

This is more of a production or theatre and docent really fit the the character. She would be shy and and trying to open up to the audience. At the start she will be quite and seem down. In the middle of the film when she’s talking about her boyfriend being abusive she will be more confident, shouting lots of facial expressions. Maybe get off the chair and stand up and try to calm her self down.

At the start of the film I want it to open on the girl in a black background and have the girl sitting on a chair saying her monolouge. By doing this it sets the scene and tells the audience that its going to be dramatic and serious. The monologue has to set the mood.

First thought of the monologue…

Opens up and you see Sophie sitting on the chair on a slight angle. Looking at the floor of a few seconds and sighs then looks at the camera and begins…

It’s funny isn’t it (pause)

The odd stuff you remember, (pause) a moment ,(pause) a feeling.

Like the moment I realised I had never driven a car before or even sat in the drivers seat. Or that I have never been on my own long enough to do simple everyday ordinary tasks.

Since I was 16 and he was 17 it has always been me and Rob. (takes a deep breath and rubs her hands on her knees and looks at the camera again.)

The first year I was happy… However my friends and sister said that it was toxic. But all relationships have there rough stages… Right?

Screen Writing Ideas

. Opens up with a monolog of Sophie talking about past sitting in a dark room or in the diving seat off her car symbolising her moving forwards.

. Starts going into detail about how exited she was when she started walking to Rob and planed to meet up.

. Cuts to them sitting in the cafe Shopie seems nervous and is quite but rob seems more open and relaxed.

. Cuts back to the car or dark room and she says ” After that my life stared to go down hill”

. Cuts to Rob and Shopie in the flat and Rob is drunk and starts being abusive and shouting at her. Rob is at the other end of the room hands the table and leaning over with his hands on a bottle. Shopie is sitting alone on the sofa and curled up trying not to cry wrapping her arms rounder legs trying to protect herself.

. Rob finally loses it and throws the bottle across the room smashing at the wall. Rob says “you stupid bitch why can’t you do anything right.”

. Shoipe runs into the bedroom and slams the door and begings to cry. She then starts screaming and banging on the door.

. Cuts to the car/ black room saying” that’s when I knew I needed to leve”

. Cuts to now and how far she has come and all the stuff in her life now and how she is enjoying life now.

. Sitting in the car about to go off on her on her journey.

I have downloded fade in a screen wighting app so I will be making my script on there. I will have a go at a short draft on Wednesday.

50 Best Screenplays To Read And Download In Every Genre

This is a really useful website and i have learnt a lot about how a script should be layed out and how to keep the audience interested.

Jerry Maguire.
screenplay by Cameron Crowe

I think this script by Cameron Crowe is really interesting and i think the layout is simple but also easy to follow/read for the actors. As it will be my first script i have ever written i want it to be easy to read and not confusing for anyone to read.

FMP Ideas

The themes we have been given for our FMP are…

The Circle
The Distance
The Choice

I’m interested in screen writing and sound but think for my FMP i will focus more the the writing and help out with sound and recording sound.

Some ideas I have come up with…

The Circle

Having someone relive a tragic event that has happend in their life and having to relive it every day.

Or getting up everyday and trying to get out the same old circle/ruteen but struggles to do so.

The Distance

Therese a girl who has experienced some bad experiences in her life and its all about her trying to over come her past and see how far she has come and her improving her life. The girl could be very shy and sensitive and shy and when she goes on her date and meets this boy she convinces her self that she is in love. But it turns out that he is a drunk and a bit abusive. It ends by her getting out of the relationship and moving on with her life.

The Choice

Boy has to chose whether or not to stay with his mum or dad after there devours.

Young boy has goten himself in a situation where he has to make a quick decision whether or not to fight or flight and could show both sides of what happend if i picked one or the other.

Here are some ideas we came up with in class.